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Summary frommos_self: Rodney dies but comes back as a guardain angel because hes really worried about John. Only Elizabeth and John can see Rodney. John and Rodney spend there evenings talking and the flame is rekindeled as they discover what might have been can still be.
Title: If Angels Could Weep Then They Would Cry I Love You With Their Tears
Author:Claire Mistress McShep's Cerulean Butterfly Lover
Pairing: McShep
Notes:
*is thought*
~is telepathic conversation~
##is flashback##
{{is Atlantis speaking}}
@/*-is non-specific higher being speaking-*/@
If Angels Could Weep Then They Would Cry I Love You With Their Tears
By Mistress McShep's Cerulean Butterfly Lover
You used to captivate me
By your resonating life
John knelt by Rodney, unconcerned about the people surrounding them. "Don't leave me," he begged his love, his fingers lying over the weakly beating heart in Rodney's chest.
"Have to... my love..." Rodney reached out and touched John's face, wiping away the single crystalline tear working its way down John's perfectly sculpted cheek. "Remember me... remember the... good times..." Rodney's breath hitched, rattling around his body in one long agonising gasp. "Remember I... love you..."
With those beautiful words, Rodney's heart finally stopped, his last breath stretching out into eternity before he was gone.
"No!" screamed John, the dam holding his emotions in check bursting and a torrent of tears flooding out of him. "Don't leave!" he sobbed, holding Rodney's body close and kissing the cooling lips, trying to force his own very life back into the corpse.
"John." Lizzie laid a hand on the grieving Colonel's shoulder. "John, he's gone," she sobbed, unable to keep her own grief inside. "Our beautiful Rodney's gone."
And Atlantis herself wept.
Now I'm bound by the life you've left behind
Your face it haunts
My once pleasant dreams
John looked into the mirror, haunted eyes staring back at him. Holding the sharp razor blade in his fingers, he looked down at the scars that decorated his arm. It had been so long since he had needed to do this, since the pain in his heart had been so great, but he knew he couldn't live without Rodney.
"Farewell, cruel world," he whispered, pressing the blade into his flesh and feeling his skin start to part.
~/~No.~/~
John looked up at the voice, dropping the blade in shock when he saw Rodney's sad face looking back at him through the mirror.
~/~You have to live, John.~/~
"I can't!" John wailed. "Not without you! Nothing is worth it if you aren't by my side to see the sun shining!"
~/~You have to live for me, John.~/~
John sobbed once, running back into the bedroom and throwing himself on the bed. He hugged the pillow close to him, breathing in the heady male scent of Rodney that was still there.
"I can't live without you, my love," he sobbed, as he sobbed himself to sleep.
Your voice it chased away
All the sanity in me
"I need to go back!" Rodney shouted into the white that surrounded him in his death.
@/*-You can't. It could change the universe as we know it.-*/@
"I don't care about the universe!" shouted Rodney. "John needs me, and I'm going to him!"
@/*-You can't change what is done. You are still dead.-*/@
"Death means nothing when it's faced with love," Rodney said, his love for John shining like a shiny light reflecting off a very shiny thing.
There was silence.
@/*-Very well.-*/@
A flash surrounded Rodney and the next thing he knew he was standing back in his and John's bedroom on Atlantis.
John lay on the bed. Sobbing.
"John?" Rodney stepped forward.
John looked up, the sobs trailing off. "Rodney?"
"I'm here! I came back for you!" Rodney ran towards the bed, preparing to take John in his arms. But his arms went through John, like the ghost-like phantom apparition he was.
"Rodney!" John sobbed.
"I'm still here. Even if I can't touch you, I'm still here," Rodney promised. "And I'm never leaving you again."
John smiled, tears leaking out of his eyes and reflecting in silver trails in the light of the twin moons in the Lantean night. "Oh, Rodney," he sighed. "I'm so glad you're back."
End part 1
Plz review. This is my first fic. I will write part 2 when I get 76 reviews. Be nice!
svmadelyn's Bad!Fic Summary ChallengeSummary from
mos_self: Rodney dies but comes back as a guardain angel because hes really worried about John. Only Elizabeth and John can see Rodney. John and Rodney spend there evenings talking and the flame is rekindeled as they discover what might have been can still be.Title: If Angels Could Weep Then They Would Cry I Love You With Their Tears
Author:
Pairing: McShep
Notes:
*is thought*
~is telepathic conversation~
##is flashback##
{{is Atlantis speaking}}
@/*-is non-specific higher being speaking-*/@
If Angels Could Weep Then They Would Cry I Love You With Their Tears
By Mistress McShep's Cerulean Butterfly Lover
You used to captivate me
By your resonating life
John knelt by Rodney, unconcerned about the people surrounding them. "Don't leave me," he begged his love, his fingers lying over the weakly beating heart in Rodney's chest.
"Have to... my love..." Rodney reached out and touched John's face, wiping away the single crystalline tear working its way down John's perfectly sculpted cheek. "Remember me... remember the... good times..." Rodney's breath hitched, rattling around his body in one long agonising gasp. "Remember I... love you..."
With those beautiful words, Rodney's heart finally stopped, his last breath stretching out into eternity before he was gone.
"No!" screamed John, the dam holding his emotions in check bursting and a torrent of tears flooding out of him. "Don't leave!" he sobbed, holding Rodney's body close and kissing the cooling lips, trying to force his own very life back into the corpse.
"John." Lizzie laid a hand on the grieving Colonel's shoulder. "John, he's gone," she sobbed, unable to keep her own grief inside. "Our beautiful Rodney's gone."
And Atlantis herself wept.
Now I'm bound by the life you've left behind
Your face it haunts
My once pleasant dreams
John looked into the mirror, haunted eyes staring back at him. Holding the sharp razor blade in his fingers, he looked down at the scars that decorated his arm. It had been so long since he had needed to do this, since the pain in his heart had been so great, but he knew he couldn't live without Rodney.
"Farewell, cruel world," he whispered, pressing the blade into his flesh and feeling his skin start to part.
~/~No.~/~
John looked up at the voice, dropping the blade in shock when he saw Rodney's sad face looking back at him through the mirror.
~/~You have to live, John.~/~
"I can't!" John wailed. "Not without you! Nothing is worth it if you aren't by my side to see the sun shining!"
~/~You have to live for me, John.~/~
John sobbed once, running back into the bedroom and throwing himself on the bed. He hugged the pillow close to him, breathing in the heady male scent of Rodney that was still there.
"I can't live without you, my love," he sobbed, as he sobbed himself to sleep.
Your voice it chased away
All the sanity in me
"I need to go back!" Rodney shouted into the white that surrounded him in his death.
@/*-You can't. It could change the universe as we know it.-*/@
"I don't care about the universe!" shouted Rodney. "John needs me, and I'm going to him!"
@/*-You can't change what is done. You are still dead.-*/@
"Death means nothing when it's faced with love," Rodney said, his love for John shining like a shiny light reflecting off a very shiny thing.
There was silence.
@/*-Very well.-*/@
A flash surrounded Rodney and the next thing he knew he was standing back in his and John's bedroom on Atlantis.
John lay on the bed. Sobbing.
"John?" Rodney stepped forward.
John looked up, the sobs trailing off. "Rodney?"
"I'm here! I came back for you!" Rodney ran towards the bed, preparing to take John in his arms. But his arms went through John, like the ghost-like phantom apparition he was.
"Rodney!" John sobbed.
"I'm still here. Even if I can't touch you, I'm still here," Rodney promised. "And I'm never leaving you again."
John smiled, tears leaking out of his eyes and reflecting in silver trails in the light of the twin moons in the Lantean night. "Oh, Rodney," he sighed. "I'm so glad you're back."
End part 1
Plz review. This is my first fic. I will write part 2 when I get 76 reviews. Be nice!
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Date: 2006-01-06 12:39 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-01-09 09:32 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-01-06 12:41 am (UTC)*snorts*
Nicely done. ;)
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Date: 2006-01-09 09:32 pm (UTC)*g*
Thanks :D
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Date: 2006-01-06 12:42 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-01-09 09:41 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-01-06 12:44 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-01-06 01:02 am (UTC)"Death means nothing when it's faced with love," Rodney said, his love for John shining like a shiny light reflecting off a very shiny thing.
*dies from explosive giggle-fit*
(okay, I lied, I'm not sorry to spam you. You *deserve* it. Eleventy one, so you do.)
*stares, frowns* Oh Christ, those are Evanescence lyrics.
I don't know you.
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Date: 2006-01-06 12:47 am (UTC)This killed me.
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Date: 2006-01-09 09:42 pm (UTC)no subject
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Date: 2006-01-09 09:46 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-01-06 01:11 am (UTC)OMG!!!!!! I can't believe that was your 1st fic! How culd u leave it their? U so have 2 fix it! Like now! Pls. Thnx. Will offer
the rest has been deleted for reasons of not wanting to inflict insanity on anyone elseUmm, thank you, I think :)
::pets John, pets Rodney
'cos she will do so at any opportunity that even vaguely presents itself; decides to sob with John but then settles on doing all 5 previously mentioned above simultaneously:: ;)no subject
Date: 2006-01-09 09:48 pm (UTC)no subject
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Date: 2006-01-06 10:08 am (UTC)*faints*
Oh don't live us there, ur so sooooo bad oMG !!11!!
(dude I can't spell crap to save my life LOL)
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Date: 2006-01-09 10:06 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-01-06 10:09 am (UTC)*cannot blink*
*tries to unstick wide eyes*
*tries blinking again*
(well you asked for 76 reviews!)
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Date: 2006-01-09 10:06 pm (UTC)*glomp*
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Date: 2006-01-06 10:12 am (UTC)What really got me (before even reading the story and the 76 reviews thing) was this
Title: If Angels Could Weep Then They Would Cry I Love You With Their Tears
Author: Claire Mistress McShep's Cerulean Butterfly Lover
Ahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha *dies*
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Date: 2006-01-09 10:07 pm (UTC)(no subject)
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Date: 2006-01-06 10:17 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-01-09 10:08 pm (UTC)(no subject)
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Date: 2006-01-06 10:18 am (UTC)"Death means nothing when it's faced with love," Rodney said, his love for John shining like a shiny light reflecting off a very shiny thing.
... I had to go to the stock cupboard because I couldn't stop laughing.
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Date: 2006-01-09 10:09 pm (UTC)(no subject)
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Date: 2006-01-06 10:52 am (UTC)no subject
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Date: 2006-01-06 12:56 pm (UTC)Great premise and I really enjoyed reading it. It's a different style and I don't suppose we go in to how/why Rodney died in the first place?
Still, I'd love to see the boys manage their relationsip after death.
:XD
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Date: 2006-01-09 10:10 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-01-06 06:29 pm (UTC)*splutters*
The badfic hurts us!
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Date: 2006-01-09 10:14 pm (UTC)no subject
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Date: 2006-01-09 10:18 pm (UTC)ZOMG. I am ded (from lafftur)
Date: 2006-01-07 05:05 am (UTC)Also? You were devastatingly and wickedly spot-on with this:
Title: If Angels Could Weep Then They Would Cry I Love You With Their Tears
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ClaireMistress McShep's Cerulean Butterfly LoverRe: ZOMG. I am ded (from lafftur)
Date: 2006-01-09 10:20 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-01-07 09:25 am (UTC)*dies*
The only thing that could have made this fic better is more spelling mistakes.
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Date: 2006-01-09 10:22 pm (UTC)no subject
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Date: 2006-01-08 02:17 am (UTC)In all seriousness, the Evanescence? Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful.
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Date: 2006-01-09 10:30 pm (UTC)emotone for this story...*grin*
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Date: 2006-01-08 05:39 pm (UTC)Ahahahahaha, that was really fabulous! True bad!fic - you can be very proud or something. Thanks for writing and sharing this :-D .
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Date: 2006-01-09 10:42 pm (UTC)